Nice rhythms
True, I do like these plugin's sounds. Instrumentally, this song is pretty great, especially the drumming; they are very nicely syncopated. Could have used more bass rhythm and volume, but that's okay. The sax and tuba both could have been mixed better (if you are, or know any sax players, note down how they play), but that's also okay. Here, melodically and rhythmically, this piece is something I would get down to. Well done!
nice advice!
lol, I just realized, by the sound of it, that's a three string guitar... T_T I guess adding 3 more strings would create a more realistic sound...
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Rock music flowing through the veins
Rock is a special genre, as it is probably the most expressive and powerful musical genre if used correctly (Seconded by only symphonic ambient music, imo). I love it when newcomers to the genre try their hand at making some awesome rocking, so welcome! I like the rhythms and the drum instrument choices, you do a good job with that, however some syncopation would be nice in this song (or just some complex rhythmic diversions). This isn't done enough in most generic radio rock, so keep this in mind. The guitar sound isn't very intense, and could be more SUPER STRENGTH (if you're using a program that allows plugins or effects with a mixer, look up Tube Amp with tone controls, turn gain up, but be wary of ear raping volume), meaning the hard-punching guitar rhythms should be way up there in terms of volume. The lead guitar sounds could have used more sweeping, and tbh was a little boring.
All in all, a good introduction to your rock skills. Keep it up man!
Woaah thank you for your detailed review! I will keep that in mind!
30 minutes is good
This song is alright, but has no real hooking. The rhythm is the main focus here, obviously, and I don't think this was exploited enough. Melodically, the song needs much more. Hearing the same tone over and over again is annoying, even if it's rhythmically awesome. For a 30 minute song (production time), it's alright, but should be more. Good effort!
thanks for the advice, i might remix this
Could be more
I've listened to a lot of ambient music, this one is one of those ones that lean towards techno, and nearly always have a bassy drum part. Ambient is, to me, meaningful and breathtaking, but it was harder to identify here. Ambient relies on dynamic change and panning, and I don't think there was enough. I didn't feel the movements in the song as they went.
The positive is the song has great potential if remastered, and with different instruments. Make sure you know what you're going for in terms of theme and feel, because otherwise you'd just be taking wild pokes at making music. I think you're better than that.
Sorry if this sounds too negative/not what you were after, I try to be as critical as I can to a composer's advantage.
thanks for that, thats actually exactly what i was after. i prefer criticism (as long as its constructive lol) over being told a song is good anyday.
this was my first attempt at ambient music, so of course it was very hit and miss, im used to making techno so no surprises it came out sounding like it really. hopefully my attempts at them will turn out better in future.
ill definitely have another go at it with all this in mind, you seem to know what youre talking about :D thanks :)
A nice theme
This was a good theme you decided to tackle, but I can't help but think you didn't get what you were aiming for. I'm probably wrong, but this sounds more like end credits. Anyhow, instrumentally, there's no flaws except I could have used more variation. An overall nice track, good work!
Well, thank you for the solid description! :D
It sounds more like the end credits indeed, but I'm fine with that as well, I wasn't aiming this at something to be a masterpiece.
Thanks for leaving a review!
Progressively...
...it gets worse, but I was trying hard tolisten to your musical ideas. It's good you posted this here, you won't get great ratings but hopefully some useful criticism.
Your production lacks experience, it seems like you don't know how to use your recording program (if it is a recording program) as well as you should to make music to your likings. This is particularly common with newcomers (I'm not making any assumptions, just giving ideas), but still you should work on this.
Melodically, you've got a good idea. Harmony, to me, is the ability for 2 phrases to work and help each other on top of each other, making sexual progressiveness. This just means I think in the future you should consider your instrument choice and listen to your piece as a whole before you make any assumptions. As a whole, the song doesn't fit one bit, and you probably know that yourself.
As you'll find out, my voting disposition is light, meaning I try to be as constructive as I can with these reviews. There's some good ideas in here, but a lot of work needs to be put into all of your music to become a masterpiece.
its not at all that i am a newcomer i just happen to be lazy and at some point i just started adding things for fun and when i realized i needed a drum beat i just made something random its called lack of patience but thank you
Mastering?
When I was new to a program called LMMS, the smoothness of the notes weren't exactly all that great. I recently learned how to choose instruments/oscillators, mix with effect channels and master better, but this has nothing to do with my technical skill.
Anyhow, all I tried to say was I'll try to ignore the technical stuff and go straight into what I think of the track. I can see you're good at making ska music, it has that feel to it.
The piano feels a little wrong in places. The melody at around halfway is a little strange. The drums fit in with the song, but the chosen instruments aren't really making it very easy.
There is little dynamic variation, or any panning (which is why I really like digital music. In the older times, panning and volume were difficult to manipulate) which took a mark. The song's putting together is well progressed though, and it's solid for a track.
In summary, if you improve your mixing/mastering skill, choose the right instruments, take the time to listen back to your music and fix minor inconsistencies, doing as much as you can, you'll have a nice track. I see a huge room for improvement, and I hope I wasn't too biased (I'm not really for ska/ punk music). Thanks for making this music for all of us!
First off, thanks for the amazing review! I love constructive criticism.
In regard to the piano feeling a little wrong and the strange melody: Allow me to explain. These aren't excuses just where I come from. I'm a drummer and have been for 11 years, so I can tell you up front there isn't a night I don't go to bed wishing I could write better melodies and chord progressions. It's something I've struggled with my entire life. I understand music pretty well and am actually still learning much in school right now. The other thing is my Father is a huge fusion Jazz guy. So I literally grew up listening to strange fusion jazz which has all kind of weird sounding things. I believe because of this when I'm writing I sometimes will write something strange but it doesn't seem strange to me because I'm so accustomed to hearing odd music. If you listen to some of my other music you will see evidence of this as well. For whatever reason, and my friends will agree, some things that sound good to me don't to your average person. Again those aren't excuses but might explain why my music may be strange at times.
In regards to mixing/mastering/ right instruments: I made this with FL Studios. I HATE fruity loops but I can't afford anything else at the moment. If I had the money I would do everything in either Pro Tools or Cubase. As you probably know FL isn't the greatest in terms of mixing and mastering, it's not like there are faders to move. If you listen to my "Rocket Jump Waltz Remix," or "To The Void" I think you will find more of what your looking for in terms of mixing and dynamic variation. Plus with those two I did everything via midi and played it through a keyboard. Where as this song was all programmed in. As you can imagine playing it in makes it much easier to make things musical. Both of those I did in Cubase and then mastered in Pro Tools. Plus just being honest I am still very new to mastering. We've just started learning about it in school so I know I'm still a noob there. lol
Thanks again for the awesome review! and I appreciate the criticism
Never heard of .Hack, but...
...this is a quality track. I like the feel of the song, especially when it builds up in the middle. Nice rhythm in the drums, feels right. Flows together quite well. I won't say too much, good work!
Lol thanks ^^ .hack is a video game series and an anime I believe... this song I think is from the games so lol.
Heavy Industrial Rock
Well done on the song. Very well made in terms of feel and melody. Rhythmically, could have used a bit more, as well as dynamically. It's alright you said this wasn't mixed as well as you could, I won't take marks from that but your could have really made this a very Professional Orgasm. Nothing wrong, and if you get even better than this than I would most certainly have to check your music out again in the future.
Cheers!
Thanks for the in-depth review! I really appreciate it.
Instrumentalisation
It's good. Not perfect, that's for sure, you probably don't need me to tell you that.
I am making a promise with myself that I would never criticize somebodies voice unfairly as they can and will only get better with time, however, I will say, there wasn't enough variation in melody. The last verse could have been done a lot better, vocally. When the "Distant Serenity" line was sung, I felt a LOT of holding back. There's nothing to lose, rock the mic like it's a casbah.
Bass was not heard enough, and could have been improved dramatically. I'm gonna disagree with the other reviewer, the instruments could have done much more. The guitar was slow and unmoving, not powerful as it could have been.
Lyrically, I'm not a fan of the kind of writing, for personal reasons, but I'll ignore that. The lyrics are well written and recorded, and I will not take marks from that.
However, there is so much room for improvement over a month, I'm gonna have to ask you to redo this in a few months, because I really want to hear it. This could be awesome on this site. Keep up your good work!
PS: If you're looking for a nice mic, Behringer are really great quality and value.
thanks for the review! yeah theres actually a lot more i want to do with it and i just havent yet...and i agree about the not enough variation in the vocal melody...we recorded it yesterday and i was sick as a dog and wanted to go to bed lol...ive got a friend of mine writing a new bass part to it as we speak and seein as he is a bassist can prolly make it more noticable from the guitars...also ill be sure to mix it slightly louder next time around...again thanks a ton for the cconstructive criticism....i really enjoy hearing what others have to say
I write music for video games. I also write video games. I am also "Fyaopo" for those who want to know.
Age 27, Male
Paul Rocker
Australia
Joined on 10/2/10
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